Yesterday i slept...
Slept with "all apologies"...
That echoes still in my head...
I love the way you said..
"All in all is all we are."
That drop D sound...
It made me numb...
Dumb and deaf world never perceive you...
Cynicism beckoned you all the way...
I love the way you have done what you love to...
I love the way you sting...
Its weed...
Always found you with tokes...
World is not humble enough to accept what they are...
They killed you...
Finally dear Kurt...
You got "NIRVANA"
Seriously Kurt..??
All in all is all we are...??
That echoes of your love...
Will always remain in my heart...

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Hi Utsav,

Nice attempt - please change Curt to Kurt in the title, it sounds odd.

The feelings you have expressed are potent, they rise above the usual

teeny-bopper hormonal gushes that often mimic poetry but fall short -

at the same time your choice of words, turns the lyrical content to something

mundane, words like cynicism which is usually an antithesis to poetry. 

If you are seriously looking at penning poetry that would sound and feel far more

sober, let me reproduce some samples here exactly on this topic, love for someone

whom you knew so well and yet you didn't. This is not criticism, I am writing these

lines to suggest alternative routes.

Regards

Max

thank you max... I agree...!

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